Continued from previous post......
He was curious as to how her life might have shaped up. He wanted to know how she was doing. He paced quickly towards her and when he was a couple of yards away from her, he called
"Hey Sweets, is that you ?"
(She stops in her tracks, turns around with an expression which seems like a collage of shock and surprise)
"Hey Av, what are you doing here ?"
"Oh my God, I cant believe this, its been ages" he says.
( His eyes are fixed on to her as if he is seeing her for the first time and trying to imprison her in his eyes, she can feel his gaze upon her and its making her feel uncomfortable)
"No dodo, its been 4 years and (looks at her mobile) almost 3 months (and flashes her i-rritated-you smile) "
"Yeah yeah, when have I ever been good with numbers. So how come here ?"
"I live here (Shrugging her shoulders), I have never seen you here before."
"Oh you live here!! So what does your husband do ? I came here on work."
(He secretly wishes, please tell me am not married, please get angry with me for asking such a stupid question, please shout at me for thinking that she would get married to somebody else)
"Oh him, He has setup practice here, he is a dentist."
(Fighting hard to keep his disappointment away from his voice)
"Oh thats so kewl, so you still with the same old job eh ?"
"Nah, I have to take care of Sid, he is still a toddler, So i took a sabattical from work. So whats happening with ya? Did ya find that one ideal women which you were always looking for (she couldnt help sounding sarcastic)
(Averting her eyes) " Yeah, I met her fine but you know what the best part is, I managed to tie the knot and we are blessed with a beautifu daughter. We named here Nirali "
" Oh, so finally u managed to name your daughter Nirali, eh ? "
" Yeah the same way you managed to name your son Siddharth" ( He couldnt keep a straight face while lying to her, He is a pretty good liar but he somehow feels she would always find out if he lies. One's eyes always gives one away when lying and at one point in time she could read him with eyes closed, he wonders whether she can still do that.)
"I am so happy for you. I always told you that you will meet the one woman wou always wanted to be with. " (She has this genuinely happy smile on her face which irritates him and makes him feel guilty about lying. He wanted to see disappointment in her face on hearing that he belonged to another woman now but all he could see was mirth.)
(Yeah rite !!!) " Now do you have to bring in those I told you SOs?" (Visibly irritated)
"Hey, why you getting so touchy about it ? I am just happy for you thats all. So tell me more about your gal"
" Ok, forget it. What abt my wife? She is the prettiest woman I have ever met ( He has always told her that she was the prettiest woman ever born, He hoped to see her dejected when he told her that he finds another woman prettier than her, but no change on her face.) She understands me quite well and shes a very nice person to talk to. She is a very good mother and what else (Shrugs his shoulders). Do you know a place where we can have a good cup of coffee here, it would be great if you can accompany me."
(She looks at her watch) " Yeah sure just around the corner theres a nice Cafe, we get pretty good Cappuccino out there."
(She starts walking in that direction and he takes a couple of quick steps to catch her up)
To be continued (at the coffee shop ;))
17 comments:
Not a bad sequel at all... Typical J factor inducing talk... Well, iam more inclined towards the climax, got some thoughts already running, lets see how the story teller actually ends it; or leave us all guessing...
o please tell us that she is lying too.....i can't handle another failed romance........please avi
next one sooooon pls
good going so far..
awaiting the next one soon, of course :)
will reserve all my comments till i read the next part :) its building well though for sure...
"Hey Av, what are you doing here ?"
Some disguise.. :-p
I betcha she's gonna end up lying too.. :-)
@ All - If you guys keep on guessing all the endings, they mite exhaust all available options. So what if she is lying (i.e if she is)do they end up with each other ? thats the question :)
@ Such - Whats in a name madame ? Its just letters put together to sound in a particular way :)
Aiyyo Aiyyo .. Enna da aachu unakku ?? The story like drifts on and on .. Make it spicy - how about something like the Movie 'Murder' ?? Get a rain sequence en-route to the coffee shop atleast :D :D
P.S - Is this what they call "Chick Lit" ??
-You Know Who-
nice lines...
waitin for the next one!!
@ Karthik - Chick lit ? Sounds good by me, Am I the first writer of this genre ?
The first male blogger to write chick lit(it shud be actually called - chicklet - goes on and on like the legendary chewing gum).. Aneeways carry on :D .. Did i tell u i like to watch tv serials :D :D
amazing mayte....ur romantic posts always have a kind of that 'bharathiraja' tinge. But u know wat? She agreeing for a coffee immedietly sounds too american da....u might wanna think abt that when u write the complete script. But good buildup....and again....fiction is it? Ballz!!!
dey one more idea....maybe u could take the story this way....he meeting sweets is just an illusion. He is sufferening from schizophrenia right from the moment she rejacted him. Enna solra? Something like the 7-G Rainbow colony style. Ok?
Its Dhruv !!!!
hello!!where is the third part?
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