Monday, May 07, 2007

Mulaqaat - A meeting - Part 3

@ the coffee place

( They both have been carefully treading the path as to not to get onto touchy issues. They both can feel the air thickening between them. They get seated at a vacant table overlooking the street.)

"Is smoking allowed here ? " ( He asks knowing very well that how much she hated smoking hoping to see some kind of resentment on her face that he has not given up on the habit)

"Yeah I guess so " ( She calls the waiter and gets it confirmed that it is allowed. He takes out a ciggy and is searching for a light.)

" They took the match box when I boarded a flight. Do you by any chance have a light ? " ( He again expected her to burst out but she dint instead she did something really strange. She took out her zippo and lighted his fag.) .

(To say he was shocked would be an understatement and he dint make any effort to conceal it either)

" Dodo what happened ? You look like a baby in a topless bar. Ha ha."

" When did you start smoking? "

" An year back, why what happened ? Amnt I allowed to smoke ?"

" Nope nothing like that, you know you have changed a lot"

" Just to quote you, People change and thats the only thing that doesnt. So in what ways have I changed "

" I mean (he stutters) look at you, you are no longer the Shruts I knew once. You look totally different, your behaviour is totally different. You smoke, you are married, you have a kid. You are not the vulnerable woman seeking reassurance from me anymore "

(There is still only amusement on her face)

" Ok, am sorry. I shouldnt have said that. Its just that I am a bit unsettled at finding you like this all of a sudden"

"Its ok Av, not a big deal. And I dont blame you either because am a lot more different than what you last saw me. I have changed, my attitude towards life has changed. I did make a few choices then though i was not convinced that they were the right ones, but on hindsight they have turned out quite well. I am a successful professional, a loving wife and a good mother to my child and I couldnt have asked for more from my life." ( She flashes her condescending smile)

(His male ego was swirling by this time. He was getting a taste of his own medicine and it was bitter. She was using the standard responses which he once used. He dint like being on this side of table.)

"But are you happy sweets ? " ( He asked in his most considerate voice)( There was just a brief moment before she responded and in that moment he felt he saw a flicker of doubt cross her face or he must have imagined it.)

" Ofcourse I am, what kind of question is that ?"

" I dont mean to offend you or anything, but its just that I want you to be genuinely happy. I just hope that you havent fallen prey to Aposteriori-Justification syndrome. Just because one cant change one's choices which have already been made one tries to justify that they are the rite ones. You know what I mean..."

" You silly, there is nothing like that you are reading too much into things. Its plain and simple I am happy (flashing her beatific smile). "

(Sipping his coffee) " Ok, as you say ( shrugging his soldiers). I would take your word for it. ( he actually smiles the first time for the evening)"

( Her Cell phone rings. She mumbles something like I will be there in 10 mins)

" Ok Av, I gotta leave now, the baby sitter said she have to leave in some time so I need to be getting back home. "( She is opening her purse)

"Hey Carry on, The treat is on me. Cya around sometime."( He smiles)

(She gathers her things and is leaving)" Ok Av, Bye. This is my Card it has got my number. It was nice meeting you after so long."

"Bye Shruts."( He somehow felt that he no longer has the right to call her sweets)

(She leaves. He is waiting for his credit card. The waitress arrives, he tips her handsomely. Collects his baggage and makes way out of the restaurant. He feels a bit cold as he enters the street. He sees a huge crowd gathering a few yards away. He can see an Ambulance rushed to the place. He thinks that there must have been an accident. He has always been amused as to why people gather around the accident spot. Is it amusement for them ? Then he discards that idea that people are not that sadistic. Probably just to know that if the victim is somebody they know. He never felt the urge to rush to the spot . As he neared the spot they were carrying the stretcher into the ambulance. The purse caught his eye. No it cant be her. A million thoughts racing through his mind. He slowly approached the stretcher and just peeked at the face on it. He couldnt believe it. She was a bloody mess. He couldnt control the scream that welled up inside him. )

"Sweeeeetttttttttttsssssssssss".


" Yeah dodo. whats the matter with you? Why are you shaking ?"

(He was confused for a few seconds. Then realization dawned upon him. Bloody hell it was just a bad dream.)

"You ok, Av ?"

"Yeah am fine."

" Then get up dodo and get ready, Sid and Niru will get late for school. Come on now get your lazy bum up."

" You are missing something sweets. You know a way to get me up from the bed, why dont ya try it ? "

"Ofooo grow up Av. You still not a kid but a father of two." (He dint give any sign of relenting)

"Ok fine come to the kitchen You will get what you want."( She says teasingly and escapes his advancing hands).

" Come on Tiger, come and get me."(He hears her from outside the room, he winces at the word Tiger, but what the hell, he runs after her. He loves this every morning ritual.)

P.S - Am sorry for posting it so late...was really busy with things.And I had tough time to give it a happy ending.

P.P.S - Why do I have this compulsive desire to Kill people in my stories. Is there a name for this kind of fetish ??



20 comments:

Divya said...

I would have definitely left a harsh comment had u killed her... there is something definitely screwed up with u... :).. Well, atleast u ended in a happy note... But then, u have left a lot to the choice of the readers, which is quite good... neways, Alls well that ends well... :)

Stallion said...

dey....disappointing end to a very well written post. But one thing is confirmed...another Bharathiraja is born. nee urupadave maata

One suggestion:

Movie name- Andha oru Kanavu
Hero- Bhagyaraj
Heroine- Radhika
Music- MS Viswanathan.

Deepa said...

*claps* *claps* :D

ashwini said...

catchyyyyyyy i too am not liking ending:( but im liking the easy style with which u have written post...:)

catch 22 said...

@ Divya - I am basically FUBARred ( Acronym for Fucked up beyond all recognition :), so that explains the screwed up part...I really had a tough time finding an happy ending, I had a totally different ending in my mind but in the end I changed it.

@ Stallion - Dei Moodra...

@ Deepa - Whats the Applause for ??

@ Ash - :) May i know why u dont like the ending ?

Dammy said...

good tiger .. keep the happy endings coming ..

ashwini said...

yes u may. its because i dont like stories which turn out to be dreams of the hero/heroine in the end. but on the other hand i wouldn't have liked it if u had killed her also, because that is a bit tooo dramatic. maybe u shud've worked on some other end......

Sindhuja Parthasarathy said...

i didnt like this :( especially catch me tiger and all that.Too corny man!

~SuCh~ said...

hehe... it was funny.. dunno why.. I caught myself grinning at this post.. could see the struggle you had gone through to avert the gory end.. It could have been poignant, couldve been heart-wrenching, could have been stylishly twisted in the end.. But the Tiger bit made it funny... so out of place.. probably a rebounding action of an extra strong pull out of the darker shades... :) Good flow tho...Av :P

catch 22 said...

@ Dammy - Eeks I wince at the mention of tiger ;)

@ Ash - I had a very unusual end in place....the end that was unheard off but my comments section would have been in flames if i had given that ending...

@ Samudraa - You findin something corny ? I feel honored ;)

@ Such - You have no clue what sort of ending I had in place but nevertheless this is the ending i came upto reason being I was constantly pinged and demanded that I finish the story and also make it a happy end for once I obliged :)...Yeah the tiger part was funny even I had a chuckle when i wrote it probably being a spiderman season thought people could relate to it but als that wa my undoing :)

Sindhuja Parthasarathy said...

chumma soladha.i have a feeling u had no other end in mind,u just cudn't think of an end cos i reality the story hadnt come to an end.And u r not too imaginateive right now.

Just to keep us all happy and thinking,u r talking about some non existent end.

and thanks for feeling honored and all that.My pleasure,anyway.

such tough word verification man.

Raj said...

haha...Mr.Av...I dont like the end either...u took the easy way out and used the bad-dream thing to find the happy ending...anyways nicely written...

aposteriori-justification...well well...

Monika said...

its very well written i mean the whole story the way it flows its so natural and comfortable....

but i have a problem here the whole three parts have been well what to say.... a disappointing end to a wonderful build up... reasons i find it that way:
1. very predictable and cleachy.
2. not too much weight in the climax
or may be the 1st and the 2nd parts were so good that i was expecting much more.... :)

PS: i hope i dont sound very rude, its just my thoughts.... i still admire the way of writing :)

Stallion said...

will u gimme a chance to write an alternate ending to this post? I promise I'll make it end the Hollywood way rather than the Tollywood ending that you have given now. Wat sat say u mate?

How do we know said...

phew! That was one fundoo story!!

Saira said...

hey cool man....IIM bangalore....good yaar...all the best ..tk cr

Uncoventional Desi said...

hi,nice story...have the same problem, all my stories, somebody has to die and generally in a brutal way:) just as i took a break from writing short stories, i started blogging and guess what..it's about murders :):)

musafir said...

Update! Update! Update!

Bah.

Anonymous said...

Update! Yes please!

Anna said...

And then ..